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"Whooooah" Quinn lands Remmy lands on top of him. Wade & Diana land on a step and Doom lands using jet boots to land on his feet Peter falls catching himself and pushes himself up. Clint lands, gets up quickly and pulls out 4 of his arrow's shoots them in a square formation around the group and some form of force field pops up from them. "New Field arrows up. Hope they hold out long enough" Doom looks up at what USED to be the Lincoln monument (we're in DC remember) and raises a gauntlet, he shoots the face…which is now that of a Kromagg. " NOW we test the weapon. He pulls out the small Vorlon device. Remmy notices it "Hey on our worlds we ran into that messed up the atmosphere, it was bigger but it did" Doom looks at him, in his eyes he almost looks insulted. "I saw that before we used it and fixed it, this device has no ill effects on my world."… We see a lot of maggs coming close all with the radiation weapons we have seen before. They start firing but the field stops it. "Let's use the device before they break through guys?" Clint says. "Yes, Ready…" Doom sets the device up and presses a button, starting the weapon. "It will fire in 15 seconds" "Uh should we be standing in ground ZERO here DOOM?" "When I used it on…" The device fired before Doom can finish
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They stand there…the only living things for a moment, then they spot a camp in the distance and walk towards it. More victims of the Kromaggs experiments, humans, altered, some blind hurt. But alive. "It Worked" Remmy said "IT WORKED. I can free home, we can find and free Wade. IT WORKED!!!" Doom shakes Remmys hand "As I said anything within my power is yours. What do you wish for?"
"Uh, help finding Wade I guess" "I will try to find her, she was sliding with you, so is she from any of your worlds?" "Mine, it’s the next one we'll go to." "Good I will record the signature of that world and search for any matches to it. If I find her I will return her to your world, assumeing she wishes to return." "Thanks, To home Quinn?" Quinn smiles "Yeah" Quinn says with a smile and opens the Vortex…
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The End… for now atleast (Who knows if I get enough responses I could have more go into DC world or Image World…I love comics so its worth a try. PLEASE respond to this if you liked it,loved it or hated it, I am SICK of only getting 1 or 2 responses when I do a fanfic THAT’S why it took so long for me to finish it.

Well, this took long enough!

Date: 8/30/99
From: Chaser9

Kidding. Nice work D. Very nice. DOOM! Doom has no need for KRomaggs BAh!

I really enjoyed this . .only one problem. Should have resolved the Wade thing. But that's all.

--Chaser9

Write a sequel w/Johnny Storm!!

Date: 8/30/99
From: buffyboy

Flame On!!
BB=:~)

Interesting...

Date: 8/31/99
From: QBall_Mallory

Certainly an interesting plot! There are a few minor errors in it, but those could be worked out during a proofread. The only major thing that concerns me is that it seems like this story pretty much ends their adventure. IMHO, there should be something that interferes with their success, unless you intended it to be an end to their sliding. (Maybe they are diverted to a different world instead of Earth Prime due to a Kromagg defense, or Doom isn't the all-powerful figure he seems to be.) Just some thoughts to ponder.

--QBall M.--
QBall_Mallory@yahoo.com

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